This story had a lot going for it – complex plot, interesting characters, colonized moon, people from many cultures – yet this wasn’t really a story, not yet. This book is in the state of really thorough outline or very rough draft. On many of the pages, there were several grammatical or spelling errors. Often, people’s names were spelled multiple ways on the same page. Twice, that I recall, there were 2 versions of a conversation, one right after the other on the same page. Sometimes there were loose ends; for example, these families were being saved from starvation and their children are mentioned briefly and then we never hear if they are found alive or dead. There were also some story inconsistencies: guns are 100% forbidden on the moon (no talk of how this is enforced) yet the moon can’t get it together enough to make laws prohibiting on-stage rape snuff shows. But mostly, there just wasn’t any cool science. Like I really wanted to know how the Bakers made Moondogy Ranch self-sustaining after only a few decades. Taken all together, I can’t really say that this was a completed work, but rather a very good and thorough idea for a book.
